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沉墨飘香

是风的陷害 　　让我从枯枝的悬崖上坠落 　　 　　远望的视野 　　降格为雪野中相拥而簇的一枚雪花 　　 　　我恨风 　　我这一生总是和风冤家路窄 　　 　　即使我上辈子以水滴的身份从大地上修炼成仙 　　又以天使的姿态飘然下界 　　 　　风也总是如影随形 　　微风暖风清风直到拿着冰冷冷的刀的寒风 　　 　　与天的距离又远了许多 　　风却再也肆虐不到我 　　 　　回头想想也好 　　高枝上的我有远眺的满足 　　大地上的我有覆盖冬天的气魄

飘扬的风帆

细读起来，有点不顺。

巾城

QUOTE:

以下是引用飘扬的风帆在2007-8-24 21:30:18的发言： 细读起来，有点不顺。

　　不是不顺，我的个见是——诗是跳跃的没错，但要处理好这种跳跃有不失整体是很难的事情。　望作者再多思考。　问好！

桃源子

My love An empty street An empty house A hole inside heart I'm all alone and the rooms Are getting smaller I wonder how I wonder why I wonder where they are The days we had The songs we sang together And oh! my love I'm holding on forever Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love I Try to read I go to work I'm laughing with my friends But I can't stop to keep myself From thinking I wonder how I wonder why I wonder where they are The days we had The songs we sang togetther And oh! my love I'mholding on forever Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again To hold you in my arms To promise my love To tell you from my heart You are all I'm thinking of Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love And hope my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love 手动播放 　 My love An empty street An empty house A hole inside heart I'm all alone and the rooms Are getting smaller I wonder how I wonder why I wonder where they are The days we had The songs we sang together And oh! my love I'm holding on forever Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love I Try to read I go to work I'm laughing with my friends But I can't stop to keep myself From thinking I wonder how I wonder why I wonder where they are The days we had The songs we sang togetther And oh! my love I'mholding on forever Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again To hold you in my arms To promise my love To tell you from my heart You are all I'm thinking of Reaching for a love That seems so far So I say a litter prayer No my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love And hope my dream will take me there Where the skies are blue to see you once again my love Overseas from coast to coast Find a place I love the most Where the fields are green To see you once again My love 手动播放

鸿鹄先生

　　桃源子对音乐很熟悉啊！谢谢你为醉里配乐！醉里少这些音乐！

盐城麦子

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